Introduction:

For this introduction I changed the opening sentences to encompass all three texts and tried to better introduce the sources used in my paper.  When comparing both the paper draft and final I also made my claim clearer for the reader to easily pick up on.

Evidence and Explanations:

When comparing both the draft and final I noticed that I did add more textual evidence from the sources used in the paper.  For instance, in the second and third paragraphs I added more information from Delpits article that helped me strengthen my claim by adding the story of Marge and further explaining why she was a good example for rising above certain ideas given to us by Gee.

Reorganization:

Ultimately I don’t think I had to do much reorganization for this paper.  I did notice, however, that for the introduction I did completely change it, I also changed the conclusion paragraph and tried to incorporate all of my ideas together in a broader sense to close out the paper.

New Paragraphs:

Like I said before I added a new introduction paragraph to my paper. I also added more to my section on Lisa Delpit to further explain her ideas and what I was taking away from her teachings, especially adding on to her disagreeing points about Gee’s work and adding my thoughts about what she had to say. Lastly, I added more to my conclusion. These paragraphs added more to my paper by solidifying certain ideas I had about the texts we read by further explaining concepts and my own thoughts.